is this to informal as a press release?

[sunshine patty]

RACEBOAT RUS Registered User Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Orlando Florida Posts: 1,629

does this look good as a press release or is it too casual The Toys Tour 2016 We would like to invite all boaters with a good heart to enjoy the 2016 Toys Tour. This most unique toy collection drive will take place in Palatka Fl at the Crystal cove resort. Boater from all over the nation will assemble here on the St Johns River for an exciting week of fun an festivities on the water . Friday the 9th of Dec our flotilla will cruise to Crescent city for lunch at one of Florida’s most unique waterfront lunch stops; then back to the host hotel for an evening meet and greet. Many refreshing drinks and snacks will meet there fait with a vigorous exchange of tall tails. Saterday dec 10th there will be an early captains meeting then boatings most celebrated run “ THE TOYS TOUR” to be followed by lunch at Renegades , Renegades always has a great menu. Return to the host hotel for a sensational meal and some full throttle partying. Sunday breakfast with your new friends before departing. Or if there is still some aventure energy cruise your boat out to Fla’s most beautiful springs. We welcome all boat speed boat jet boat pontoon boat or center council all are welcome all that is required a boat a party attitude and a toy to share . The Toy Run is free but there is a charge for meals drink T-shirts and prizing packages. We very much look forward to seeing you and you crew __________________ get it wet and go fast

[sunshine patty]

I hope that this is not to grass-rooted?

[Markus]

Well, with that grammar and spelling, you are unlikely to attract too many professors emeriti in the humanities, but I doubt they are your target group anyway...

[sunshine patty]

a million thanks for your input. we will rewrite, perfection is not easy..

[flabum1017]

RACEBOAT RUS Registered User Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: Orlando Florida Posts: 1,629

does this look good as a press release or is it too casual The Toys Tour 2016 We would like to invite all boaters with a good heart to enjoy the 2016 Toys Tour. This most unique toy collection drive will take place in Palatka Fl at the Crystal Cove Resort. Boaters from all over the nation will assemble here on the St Johns River for an exciting week of fun and festivities on the water . Friday the 9th of December, our flotilla will cruise to Crescent city for lunch at one of Florida’s most unique waterfront lunch stops then back to the host hotel for an evening meet and greet. Many refreshing drinks and snacks will meet there fate with a vigorous exchange of tall tales. Saturday December 10th, there will be an early captain's meeting then boating's most celebrated run “ THE TOYS TOUR” to be followed by lunch at Renegades. Renegades always has a great menu. Return to the host hotel for a sensational meal and some full throttle partying. Sunday, have breakfast with your new friends before departing. Or if there is still some adventure and energy cruise your boat out to Fla’s most beautiful springs. We welcome all boat speed boats, jet boats, pontoon boats or center console boats, all that is required is a boat a party attitude and a toy to share . The Toy Run is free but there is a charge for meals, drinks, T-shirts and prizing packages. We very much look forward to seeing you and you crew! __________________ get it wet and go fast

Fixed it for you ;-)

[Bodhi]

Fixed it for you ;-)

Haha, now I get it

[sunshine patty]

thanks , it is great that you are able to help. If you have a chance come on out to the Toys Tour...